Need help writing an email to a professional.?

Repetition and run-on sentences are common errors. Lose the commas and turn the first two sentences into four. Give your teacher's name once. Also, do a search on the professional in question as well as his company if you know it. It might help you with what to write and will definitely help during the interview process. Don't make too much effort to impress with it, but do show that you've done your research.